* Demonstrate the ability to approach writing as a recursive process that requires substantial revision of drafts for content, organization, and clarity (global revision), as well as editing and proofreading (local revision).
I believe that I have demonstrated the ability to approach writing as a recursive process that requires substantial revision of drafts for content, organization, and clarity (global revision), as well as editing and proofreading (local revision). In my second draft, I was writing down ideas and themes, not fully developed thoughts. In my final draft, I made sure to properly conclude paragraphs and fully develop my thoughts and ideas.
Above I have highlighted a section that I developed. This section needed to be revised and organized to truly portray the point I was making. In the second draft, I dropped the quote in and didn’t do any analysis. Above you can see that I ended my paragraph with a quote. Once in my final draft, I made sure to extend the quote so I was working with multiple sentences and not just a snippet. This allowed me to further my writing to discuss how people want a connection with their phones more than what’s in front of them. I also made sure to analyze the quote and describe what it meant and how it related to what I was saying. I described how we turn to our phones as an escape, backing up what Blood says.
